6/03/2012

[Step Three]-1 Outline



*The house should ban school uniforms. There are no justifiable reasons for schools to force students to wear uniforms.

1.    It is expensive!
-The average of the school uniforms is about $250 per one pair around the world. The total range would be about $200~$1000. How can everyone support this? Isn’t this too much of a financial burden for middle/lower class parents? They would even have to buy more and more whenever their children grow.
-Even if there is a financial aid from the government, they still have to pay. The line between whom to support and whom not to, is not certain. Even those who are not as poor to get financial aid might feel it too expensive.
-We still need other clothes even if we already have school uniform to wear. Uniforms are just for school. It’s not like we’re going to wear school uniforms 24/7. School normally ends at 3~4 p.m. Parents would have to pay for both school uniforms and other clothes whereas they would have had to pay only for normal clothes if there were no school uniforms.

2. Individuality/ creativity should be encouraged
-Article 19 of The Universal Declaration of Human Rights states that “Everyone has the right to freedom of opinion and expression.” Schools are keeping children from developing their own creativity and expressing their individuality by making them wear the same clothes.
-There are other programs for creativity? They are unnecessary if the schools are not allowing children to express their creativity from the most basic thing like what to wear. Clothes are the fundamental ways of showing themselves.

3. (Counter-argument) Sense of equality
-If there is no school uniform, poor kids would tend to wear cheaper clothes and that can be a reason for being bullied.
à Is conformity the only way of preventing bullies? Schools should try to teach children that everyone is different. That’s what education is. Making everyone look the same is only a short term solution; there are other factors of bullying, too. Learning conformity at school is what makes children turn discriminative towards people who are only a little bit different from them. They should try to teach the difference between people and how they all should be respected. That is what the education is, in long term. If school uniforms are important in a way of conformity, the enforcement for wearing them cannot be justified.


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  1. Hello Miss Park,

    I notice you've changed you've redecorated your blog. Despite the absence of upbeat pop music and cheerful colors, I like this modernist look of cleanliness and order.

    Furthermore, I am very impressed with the flourish of posts you've published which reflect the solid ground work you are undertaking to write an intriguing essay. This is a good topic, and you will be able to use "I" quite effectively in illustrating your opinion.

    It seems you've done some reading and know what's what, so I think the next thing you should do is harvest the quotes you want to use. With this essay, you have a golden opportunity to deliver a nice hook in the first paragraph. How you do that is up to you, and you already have a bit of one in Step One, but I think you can do better by illustrating and/or contrasting two different classrooms.

    In my opinion, the school uniform is great. I wish I'd had the opportunity to wear one, and when I look at highschools in the US and Canada compared to this one, I see a lot less ego and vanity, and a deeper sense of purpose and equality. There are two things, I believe, students should put off until they reach university: dating and fashion.

    Nice work so far.

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